Formal Email/Letter
To:
brad.blackstone@singaporetech.edu.sg
From:
2102349@sit.singaporetech.edu.sg
Subject:
Self-Introduction and Expectations for the module (UCS1001 – Critical Thinking
and Communicating - L1)
Dear
Professor Brad,
My name
is Ruthvika Putti, and I am writing to introduce myself to you as a student in
your critical thinking and communicating class. I am currently studying
Robotics Systems Engineering at Singapore Institute of Technology as a Year 1
student and I have previously graduated with a Diploma in Aerospace Engineering
from Republic Polytechnic in 2021.
My
professional interest in the field of robotics engineering first noticeably
developed during my internship where I was assigned a project to develop the main system of the New Vacuum Reefer with different types of sensors. I had to
use Arduino which is an online software interface that enables the coding of
various electronic components, in this case, the sensors, to input and store
values which then created the desired output. I found that I had enjoyed the
creative thinking and problem-solving processes taken to build, design, and
create the system and so I entered the field of robotics engineering.
During
my three years of poly, I would often have to give presentations as well as to
attentively listen to presentations done by my peers, and engage with them by
asking questions on the topics they have presented. Thus, this aspect became a
communication strength as it molded me into becoming an active and effective
listener. I also lacked applying adequate physical communication such as body
language, gestures, and tone during the presentation which I consider as a communication weakness.
The
two specific goals that I have for this module are to improve my non-verbal
communication including my body language and presentation of myself in addition
to becoming a better critical thinker and effective communicator. A unique
aspect of me is that I am not afraid of failure as I think that it plays a
significant role in the experimental process of success.
Thank you,
Ruthvika Putti
Hi Ruth, your self introduction letter is very informative about the different points that were required to be elaborated in the assignment. I especially found that your professional interest in engineering is well elaborated and captures how your past experiences are linked to this course. Just one note would be that I do not think you need to add a paragraph space for you first paragraph. Thank you for your letter and hope to get to know more about you.
ReplyDeleteHi Harsh, thank you for your feedback. I will take them into consideration and make the necessary alterations.
DeleteGreetings Ruthvika Putti,
ReplyDeleteIt is fascinating to see how the process of the project in your internship vacuumed you into field of robotics engineering.
Some pointers you might want to explore:
1. Un-capitalization of words, "New Vacuum Reefer", unless it is the name of a product.
2. May want to rephrase certain sentences that captures the way you speak, for instance, "system and so I", "I had to use".
3. Might want to proofread your letter once more, I found some verb form errors, some can be negated by removing or replacing words or phrases.
Feel free to contact me if you require clarifications.
Regards,
Timothy Lee
Hi Timothy, thank you for your in-depth feedback. I would like to clarify that the New Vacuum Reefer is indeed the name of the product, and as for the other pointers, I will take them into consideration and make the necessary alterations.
DeleteDear Ruth,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this highly informative, clear and concise letter. Learning about your robotics learning journey was enjoyable as you explained in fine detail the poly project work you did. My only questions are these: Did you manage to develop the vacuum reefer? Is that some sort of cleaner?
I also appreciate your fine reflection on a communication weakness and strength, and your module goals. I do hope this module can address your needs. (In terms of your embracing of failure, many great thinkers and innovators, including Elon Musk, have said the same thing.)
Let's start by looking at a minor language use issue that can be easily resolved: punctuation.
-- I had to use Arduino which is an online software interface that enables the coding of various electronic components, in this case, the sensors, to input and store values which then created the desired output. >
I had to use Arduino, which is an online software interface that enables the coding of various electronic components, in this case, the sensors, to input and store values, which then created the desired output.
-- I had enjoyed the creative thinking and problem-solving processes taken to build, design, and create the system and so I entered the field of robotics engineering. >
I had enjoyed the creative thinking and problem-solving processes taken to build, design, and create the system, and so I entered the field of robotics engineering.
-- I also lacked applying adequate physical communication such as body language, gestures, and tone during the presentation which I consider as a communication weakness. >
?
Take note that a comma usually sets apart any dependent clause from other clauses and it separates independet clauses.
I look forward to seeing what sort of project work your team will focus on.
Cheers,
Brad
Hi Professor Brad, thank you for your valuable criticisms. I will take them into consideration to further my learning.
DeleteI would also like to clarify that the New Vacuum Reefer is not a cleaner but more of a housing system to contain the sensors and their circuits (which I had to test on). To explain more, I had to actually measure the temperature, pressure and other factors for different sensors under two set conditions which are at sea-level and absolute level for a particular location (where the sensors are located in real time).